I’m writing a book series called Tips For Better Fiction Writing, in which I tackle all the rookie mistakes new writers make.
And hey, I made them, too.
Which is why I’m helping you not make them.
Until the next book in the series comes out, you’ll see these gems here on the blog.
Here’s today’s example. The names are changed from the original manuscript.
The Original Paragraph:
Dr. Glynns stopped with his cane just outside the open doors. “There you are.” He sounded irritated and he was looking at Brandi. “The paperwork is waiting. Come back to your office and get started, or it will never get done.”
What’s my issue here?
- He sounded irritated
What’s that sound like? Hmm…
- and he was looking at Brandi.
The crutch word LOOK
Possible substitutions for LOOK in this example: Glaring, frowning, scowling…
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